A barefoot boy walked down the dusty road. He was dressed in the garb of a gypsy, but on closer examination proved not to be a gypsy, but a minstrel of sorts. No gypsy would travel alone, and he was alone, except for his animals.
On his shoulder was a monkey, dressed very much like him, who kept snatching the boy’s hat, although it was several sizes too large and covered the monkey’s wrinkled face completely.
At his side was a huge golden dog. She came up to his waist, although, admittedly, that was not an exceedingly long distance, as he was a small boy, looking a good deal younger than his 15 years. He was very slight, although if you had wanted to pick a fight with him you would have been very surprised at his strength and agility. His name was Aydan...
Very interesting... and I'm wanting to know more.
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Too many uses of the word "although" - unless of course it's intentional and for effect.
Say, did you know that the name "Aidan" (yes - I know - different spelling) means "fiery"?
This sounds very similar to "Castaways of the Flying Dutchman" by Brian Jacques. A few variances, but basically the same idea.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure she'd read it yet when she wrote this (it's a couple of years old). But it's possible. We'll find out for sure when she wakes up this morning.=)
ReplyDeleteWe had fun guessing what the author had been reading recently when we were reading Eragon, that dragon story by the homeschooled teen.
Most writing is somewhat derivative, especially that of young writers. Which is one more reason why, I think, it's so important that they spend a lot of time reading well written books.
I know what you mean. I'm working on a novel - and each little bit of plot I think "That sounds like ____ and that sounds like ____" But after all, there is nothing new under the sun! I just always figure - it may have been done before, but it hasn't been done yet by me!
ReplyDeleteWell, he's barefoot, and in most places, no shoes, no service.
ReplyDeleteBlest- I've read somewhere that there are really only seven plots in all the world.
This sounds very similar to "Castaways of the Flying Dutchman" by Brian Jacques. A few variances, but basically the same idea.
ReplyDeleteAh, yes, I have read that, but I honestly have no idea if it was before or after I actually wrote this down.
Blestwithsons- The ussage of although so many times was an accident.
No, I didn't know Aidan meant "fiery." It fits, though.
Oh, and the dog's name is Iala. Ee-yal-ah. I've forgotten how to spell the monkey's name. :-)
We had fun guessing what the author had been reading recently when we were reading Eragon, that dragon story by the homeschooled teen.
ReplyDeleteI bought that book -- got maybe a third of the way through it and got bored with what seemed to be a fairly mediocre retelling of Star Wars: Episode IV in a fantasy setting.